1) My Grandparents
As I can recall, a couple years ago this was the pet my grandpa and grandma bought from the humane society! They named it Padfoot. I never knew it's gender but I never really cared. This creature was like one of those things you see in movies like Lilo and Stitch or on You Tube. But as you could have guessed, This creature had issues, it was not normal. It never went to the bathroom and if it did I watched it use the actual restroom. It never was in a bad mood but if it was, it was the reaction to Gremlins if they got water on them, Padfoot would go crazy! My grandparents have taken a special love interest into this creature and so have I. I visit quite often just to see Padfoot.
2) Harry Potter
Walking onto the Hogwarts train, Harry noticed something flash in the corner of his eye, he looked to find Loony or Luna Lovegood with her pet for the year, bouncing off the walls of the box cart. Harry asked, "Luna ah, what is that?" Luna replied, "Why it keeps away the Nargles and Snorflax." Harry realized this was nothing out of the norm for Luna was known for being well unique. After what seemed like a century of talking with her, he decided to find another cart. Harry found the cart with all of the Slytherans and decided to keep up his pace for bloody Malfoy would have something to say and oh did he make him mad. He found a cart with Ron and Hermione and sat down. " Did you see what Luna brought for her pet this year?" said Harry to Ron. "Ya its bloody hell if ya ask me." said Ron. " Honestly Ron, you actually think that she is going to get away with that? If either of you have read the rule book your first year it says that all student s must provide their own pets, such as owls, frogs, rats, cats and plants. It does not meet the school rules there for is unprohibited! " Hermione says. "Man its good to be back home!" Says Harry.
2 comments:
Peace and Love- Your first story was very funny. I liked how you made the creature into a pet. However, you have to rememember if your audience is your grandparents. That means that you should be writing for them. They are the ones who are listening to your story. I'm not so sure it was supposed to be about your audience. The second story was super good. I loved all the words and phrases from the Harry Potter books that you used. The names and familiar places made it very fun to read. The only thing I would say is that you might want to change your audience to Harry Potter fans because you aren't writing to or for Harry Potter. Both stories were good and really funny.
hey peace and love good stories and lots of creative word choices. i dont think that you read the instructions correctly. you should have written the stories to your grand parents and to harry potter fans. i liked that you turned the ugly creature into a pet in both stories. the creature seemed like it would fit in great in the harry potter books!! with the grandparent story it was cool how you described how it got mad (by water).
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